(Excerpt 2) – “Windswept and interesting” – Restructure

Dover street certainly was noisy. The sound of coalmen, their carts and their horses reverberating along the streets, while the local ragman grab your attention with military-like bugle calls: ‘doo doo di doo!’

Chimney sweeps wheeled their barrows up to the tenement entryway and yelled ‘sweeeeep’ so that their voices carried up the stairwell. Children would be kicking a ball around the street, with lampposts as their assigned goalposts. Meanwhile, women would be perched on window ledges or leaning out of windows, having a chat with each other or bellowing at the children down below: “And just what have I told you about chucking stones…?”

Dover street sure was rowdy. The bustling thunder of the coalmen with their horses and carts, while the junkmen would split the atmosphere to arrest you attention: ‘doo di doo, doo di doo…’ went their bugle calls.

The chimney sweeps bellowing in the courtyards and echoing up the stairs: “Sweeeeep!” hand-barrows in tow. Children playing footie up and down the street, lampposts as proxy for their goalposts. Above street level, the women nestling themselves on the window sills and dangling out of the windows to talk to one another and scold the children down below: “Stop throwing stones! I’ve told you before!”

Always a cacophony at Dover street. Coalmen bustling and clattering with their horse and cart, all the while being called to attention by the rag and bone man as their bugle sings out: ‘doo di doo, doo di doo…!’

The chimney sweeps would guide their wheel barrows right up to the tenement entryways and send a shout of ‘sweeeeep’ up the stairs. The locals kids would be knocking a ball around the street using the lampposts as their goal. Upstairs, the women would seat themselves on the windowsills or lean out to talk with the others. Either that, or to keep the children down below in check: “What’ve I said to you about throwing stones…?”

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